Expression In Sketching - Tonal value

Techniques for tonal shading: 

hatching

crosshatching 

scribbling

stippling

Tonal Values Exercises:

Arrange on a table at least 6 common items such as: Pencils, paperclips, coins, keys, watch, scissors, pencil sharpener. (Any 6 items that we have it on hand.)These objects may overlap each other in your arrangement. Create an interesting composition for these objects; take care to record the proportions of each object and their size relative to one and another. Achieve depth with scale and overlap.

This was my first submission

yet due to get only 5/10 marks..

I wish to have much better out come 

Then I decided to redo....

This is my redo for the excerise.. 

I was quite disappointed with my marks again due to get the same marks with the previous one although I get some good comments from my redo work. 

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